This is a PDF file of a student writing to go to Michigan State University.
I love how she started off in this essay. She uses vibrant words to describe the way the feathers looked as the hawk flew away and the way she felt during that exact moment. The student shows determination and has had so much experience throughout her life to show for that. She seemed to have worked very hard in her life to try and pursue her dreams,
The essay is about seven pages which confuses me a little because most personal statement essays are about two pages; three pages at most. This means I have to dig a little deeper to find out what my colleges are looking for when it comes to writing the personal statement.