I enjoyed reading the second personal statement here (Essay#2). This person was accepted into the 2006 class of University of New Mexico’s dental school. I love how they started the essay with an engaging anecdote, a personal experience that they had when they were younger. The author bolsters the rest of the essay, however, with his/her hand on experiences with dentistry, such as working at a homeless shelter and seeing first-hand how neglect of oral hygiene is detrimental to one’s well-being. I like how s/he said that helping the homeless improve their oral health gave them confidence to look for work, and some even came back to tell the author of their new found success. I used a similar approach in my essay by using a personal anecdote (although mine is not introduction, but rather in the first paragraph). I did not talk about my professional experience with dentistry and instead talked about empathy and my philosophy toward the doctor-patient relationship. If in the next year before I apply to dental school I gain a similar, rewarding experience like that of the author, I may choose to include it in my essay and bolster the main idea of my essay.
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